I am 17 right now.In ten years i would like to make my dreams come true.
i would like to study in a physical education and sports academy, and became a basketball trainer.
After that i would like to be a NY Knicks player.
My biggest dream is to make my own business, because it's everytihing i always wanted in my life.


Chciałbym zapytać czy jest poprawnie i co o nim sądzicie pozdrawiam

Witam!

Uważam, że praca napisana jest bardzo dobrze, jednak zmieniłbym nieco kolejność zdań i dodał na sam koniec zdanie podsumowujące.

I am 17 right now. In ten years i would like to make my dreams come true. My biggest dream is to make my own business, because it's everytihing I always wanted in my life.
I would like to study in a physical education and sports academy, and became a basketball trainer.
After that i would like to be a NY Knicks player. To sum up, there are a lot of things that I haven't tried yet and I would be very glad to have an opportunity to experience most of them.

Pozdrawiam. =]